Is the purpose to be exciting? Or is to help you start what you've always wanted to? This whole section reads weird and generic."Noah's Box strives to help you be successful when you're going through a new phase in life by giving you the tools you need with out the time and effort to research." We’ve paved the foundation for this very reason. To help people start what they’ve always wanted to or explore new things. We handpicked items based on detailed customer feedback.īut most of all.
Starting something new? Like what? And you handpicked items based on what I recommended? Re-word that. Everything in the box is there for a reason.īe moire specific. We’ve handpicked the highest quality items based on your recommendations. Some of the wording doesn't come across as clear or natural to me. Which may just be a difference in culture, I'm in the US. It also gives you a chance to be personal and get people into your brand. Service names can be random and meaningless sometimes, but I want to know why you went with Noah's box. I don't see any about us section or anything.
I also have no idea why it's called Noah's box. Also, towrads the top it says average review 9.3, but that's placed next to a 5 star rating system. Yeah reviews are great, but when your idea isn't clear, and it's relatively niche being the highest rated is less valuable. I don't care about that nearly as much as you seem to think. You push the messaging of "UK's highest rated starter box!". "From starting college or moving into your own place for the first time Noah's Box has all-in-one boxes to get your new life up and running!" Something like that. I think you need some kind of tag line to succinctly get your message across. I get the gist, but I can see being confused. I like the idea, though like another poster said there's room for confusion as to what exactly you're selling.
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